A poem, please read, a friend says my best yet? - rum made with picture inside of bottle
A torn, ragged, an old leather jacket,
Wrinkles and folds, refer to my first love.
A photo of my brother, the last before the war,
and the number of lovers, whose contributions I ignore.
A liqueur glass of rum and my first Coke
smoke and a slight vacuum, my first.
A newspaper obituary about a man who does not know
and photographs of places, I was not.
A personal T-shirt, my first official act,
my new home first, a brass doorknob.
My notebook filled with poetry,
dry pasta, I never learned to cook.
A wedding ring, my second divorce,
( "Separation" has little of course).
A bicycle tire, I have never Rode
sent a key to the house, not the residence of MI.
A screw the tree house, my father and I
the first payroll was paid for me.
And hanging from a necklace, a whiff of beer Heinekin,
My first trip to New York to a crumpled map.
Years ago, he was gone, a touch of my laptop
And a bracelet with wire wrapped around a popS.
15 comments:
Your friend is right! I love your poem! Keep writing! : D
Your friend is right! I love your poem! Keep writing! : D
Very good! But I would certainly get my salary in cash, lol 1, but a lot of things, is the sentimental value, the store mad. Every little thing that is saved as a memento of the event. They are like paintings worth 1000 words. I very much appreciated, and gave me the mood positive. Nice.
I love it. A true talent, really honest. When I am writing to you, I hold copyright and this thing. Then it is published. Because you have it in themselves.
WOW WOW WOW! WOW!
It was excellent! You've got a poetry contest or take her to a poetry contest!
Awsome! After the living testimony of the futility of providing simulated meanings for a lifetime of memories ... But in the right direction ...
I mean, what is remarkable is that these little things make all the fabric of reality, a human being ...
People are just beautiful animals who have their business-Ing things with their perspectives and actions ..
Very nice ... I like!
Many of the images here very well. I like his emphasis on memory and even a sense of power. Normally, poems, as you fill me with too many things, but I was not the problem here. I really liked.
Your friend is correct. This is amazing. Please keep it up! \\ \\ \\ \\ \\ \\ \\ \\ U0026lt, 33
This is a list of images in a cumbersome instrument.
I like it. I especially like how the reader to understand that they get slightly memories of important memories.
Maddy
That is more than I had expected. She took up the issue that I have given you, turned around and ran with it. Perfect. What an awesome poem. I'm proud of you.
... ... \\ \\ \\ \\ \\ \\ \\ \\ U0026lt; voice> beautifully written ... gives me a sense of their own longing ...
"It is wonderful for your friend is right u should put more
nice. some softer lines could read my mind, but I like the theme.
nice. some softer lines could read my mind, but I like the theme.
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